Merged A Thread for AlexPontik to Explain his Ideas

I started reading this, and reached the sentence that says "When something doesn’t make sense, it isn’t worth out(sic) time and effort..." and I thought, right on! So I stopped right there.
 
I followed a coherent thought in the prologue about declining quality/service for the same money. I call that "Life". Then we descended into the seventh circle of Google translate hell and I saw something shiny on another thread.
 
it seems only people who didn't really want to read replied...

now why those dudes spend the time to do so...

you think you are funny?

Nah...you ain't funny yet.
 
AlexPontik. Brah. Not even joking here. Your OP is unintelligible to an English speaker. I mean this constructively. The particular words posted, in that particular order, have no clear meaning.
 
AlexPontik said:
it seems only people who didn't really want to read replied...

now why those dudes spend the time to do so...

you think you are funny?

Nah...you ain't funny yet.
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I am sure you think your opening post was profound and groundbreaking. It was gibberish hence the reaction you got.

If you do have a point make it simply and succinctly.
 
AlexPontik said:
it seems only people who didn't really want to read replied...

now why those dudes spend the time to do so...

you think you are funny?

Nah...you ain't funny yet.
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I'm not intending to be funny, at least not to you. I am intending to notify you that your posts are incoherent and not readable. I do admire the postmodern, self-referential beginning in which you advise us not to waste our time reading on, but suspect it was unintentional.

However, you can count me thus as one reader who takes at least a small amount of what you said seriously enough to heed it!
 
Alex, when your text meets with incomprehension, the best thing to do is paraphrase it.

Try that. It might work.
 
If you expect me to actually read anything like that slap in on the side of a bottle of hippie soap so I can do it in the shower.
 
SuburbanTurkey said:
The problem with money? Simple, I ain't got enough of it.

har har har.
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Money, get away. You get a good job with good pay and you're okay. Money, it's a gas. Grab that cash with both hands and make a stash. A new car, caviar, four star daydream, think I'll buy me a football team. Money, well, get back. I'm all right Jack, keep your hands off of my stack. Money, it's a hit. Don't give me that do goody good ********. I'm in the high-fidelity first class travelling set, you know, I think I need a Lear jet. Money, it's a crime, share it fairly but don't take a slice of my pie. Money, so they say, is the root of all evil today. But if you ask for a raise its no surprise that they're giving none away......
 
smartcooky said:
Money, get away. You get a good job with good pay and you're okay. Money, it's a gas. Grab that cash with both hands and make a stash. A new car, caviar, four star daydream, think I'll buy me a football team. Money, well, get back. I'm all right Jack, keep your hands off of my stack. Money, it's a hit. Don't give me that do goody good ********. I'm in the high-fidelity first class travelling set, you know, I think I need a Lear jet. Money, it's a crime, share it fairly but don't take a slice of my pie. Money, so they say, is the root of all evil today. But if you ask for a raise its no surprise that they're giving none away......
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*drops back into 4/4 time and powers into the break*
 
Norman Alexander said:
*drops back into 4/4 time and powers into the break*
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Yup. The only thing wrong with money is that I could never quite perfect ALL those switches from from 7/4 to 4/4. I used to cheat by dropping a 1/4 note on the way to down and slipping in an extra 1/4 on the way up.... but then I was no Nick Mason! :D
 
AlexPontik said:
it seems only people who didn't really want to read replied...

now why those dudes spend the time to do so...

you think you are funny?

Nah...you ain't funny yet.
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AlexPontik, I started reading your essay but got only about six hundred words in before giving up.

I suspect English is not your native language. Usually that isn’t a problem. I’ve seen countless examples of people who start a post apologising for not being a native English speaker, then go on to write something that puts native English writers to shame. Unfortunately, that’s not the case here.

The main problem is you don’t tell your reader just what your point is. There are a lot of words, and the sentences are relatively coherent, but they’re along the lines of colourless green sheep sleep furiously. Yes, the sentences are grammatically correct, but as a whole the words in them don’t make sense. The final line in the text (“MAMA in the end puts order.”) is an excellent example of this.

You use ellipses (“…”) far too much; there are 61 of them in 2,800 words. In English they’re typically used to indicate an incomplete thought. Therefore, sixty times in the essay you started a thought and then dropped it. That makes your entire effort quite incoherent.

To make this coherent and give us something to discuss, you need to do the following:

  • Cut out about ⅔ of the words. Eliminate or re-write sentences where you used ellipses. Your initial post is 2,800 words; you could probably get your point across in just over a thousand. Be aware, though, even that would try the patience of many on this forum.
  • At the start, state outright in a single short paragraph just what you think the problem with money is
  • Next, state briefly (in a series of single sentences) what led you to that conclusion
  • In the main body of the text, expand upon those sentences with explanations and examples
In the absence of the above, you can expect future replies to have same lack of engagement that you’re complaining about in this thread.
 
smartcooky said:
Yup. The only thing wrong with money is that I could never quite perfect ALL those switches from from 7/4 to 4/4. I used to cheat by dropping a 1/4 note on the way to down and slipping in an extra 1/4 on the way up.... but then I was no Nick Mason! :D
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I'm not a musician's bootlace - cannot even knock two sticks together in time. But I'm fascinated by time signatures in music. Maybe it was realising why, at a young age, Dave Brubek's Take Five was so different and then figuring out why.

As for the OP, it looks like randomised madlibs, really.
 
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The OP only just barely touches on the problems with money. You're better off without it. Just send all of yours to me and your life will be a lot better.
 
Norman Alexander said:
I'm not a musician's bootlace - cannot even knock two sticks together in time. But I'm fascinated by time signatures in music. Maybe it was realising why, at a young age, Dave Brubek's Take Five was so different and then figuring out why.

As for the OP, it looks like randomised madlibs, really.
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Side note, if you like odd time signatures, and like folky kinds of stuff and guitar virtuosi, check out The Pentangle, especially some of their older albums like Sweet Child.

Here's one in what appears to be 5/5 time:

 
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